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Post by Moonlight of Forestclan on May 8, 2008 19:42:52 GMT -5
Name: Shadowpool Age: 24 moons Desired Clan: Iceclan Desired Position: Deputy Gender: She-cat Pelt: Long haired black pelt. Has black nose,paws, fluffy black tail, and black claws. Eye's: she has frosty blue eyes. Personality: She is short tempered most of the time but also caring an kind to her clan mates. History: Shadowpool grew up normal. the deputy before her died of the rare black cough. she becaame deputy. Role Play Example:September, 7, 2010 I was waiting at the bus stop waiting for the big yellow bus to arrive. My sister, Angel, had mysteriously disappeared the night before. Once the bus arrived i stepped on and went to the back."hi Luke." i said looking at him. "hi Calista."he said back. "anything interesting?"he asked. "well, my sister had mysteriously disappeared last night. The police couldn't find her anywhere, there where no traces of blood or anything.but...." i broke off. "what? Tell me."Luke pressed. "The police found one thing...." i said slowly. "what did they find?"Luke was curious now, urging me on. "They found pieces of strange metal mixed with pieces of her pants." I blurted out. The bus had come to a stop. they where at their school. Calista lives in Stephens ville, Texas. The small town has a history of UFO sitings. How you found out about Warriors of Silverpelt: you know how willowheart.
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Post by Violetclaw on May 19, 2008 8:17:13 GMT -5
Moonlight, you can't say that the leader to Iceclan die's, that position is already taken and plus you need to make the your Personality and History long, maybe about 5, 6 or 7 more lines on both. Your role play expamle is fine, but the other stuff needs to be fixed.
~Violetclaw(star)~
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